Tip #8 for writing in deep POV is to use specific details. Details show, and showing instead of telling deepens your character’s POV.
For example, let’s look at the following two phrases. The first one tells; the second one shows:
A nice car (telling)
A shiny, silver Lexus in mint condition (showing)
The same principle works when you describe your character’s feelings. Show them through specific details. Here are before and after examples:
Before: She felt fear when he entered the room. (Telling)
After: Her breath lodged in her throat when he entered the room.
In this second example, you have SHOWN the character’s emotions by using specific details: breath, lodged, and throat.
Now look at your own WIP and circle those sentences that tell instead of show. Then revise them by using specific details.