We have reached our last tip for writing in deep POV. This tip is a tool that will really help you to know if you are doing it correctly. The tip is this: Write your scene in first person POV as though you were the main character. Then rewrite the scene in third person limited (aka deep POV). Which of the two third-person POV scenes draws you more closely into your character?
Here is an example, again from my own writing:
Before (3rd person):
Hidden from view, Sandra watched her boyfriend Paul escort her best friend to a table at the other end of the restaurant. Sandra’s eyes flashed darts and her face turned a flaming red as she realized that Paul had been lying to her all along.
Hidden from view, I watched my boyfriend Paul escort my best friend to a table at the other end of the restaurant. The shameless beast! Paul had been lying to me all along. Saying he couldn’t see me because he had to work late. He was nothing but a cheat. And with my best friend, no less. My eyes flashed darts and my face turned a flaming red.
After (3rd person, deep POV):
The shameless beast! He’d been lying to her all along. Saying he couldn’t see her because he had to work late. He was nothing but a cheat. And with her best friend, no less. Sandra’s fists clenched and her face burned.
Do you see that in the “after” example, we are “deeply” inside Sandra’s skin?
The key is to write as though you are experiencing the event. If you were experiencing the event above, you would not be able to see your own eyes flashing with darts and your face turning a flaming red.
Now take one of your scenes and rewrite it in first person. Then rewrite it again in deep POV, aka third person limited, using the changes you made in your first person scene.
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